I love the poem. I just think the line "Or is it obvious that I’m just saying what you want to hear" might read better as; "Or do you think that I'm just saying, (new line here) What you want to hear." I sent you an email explaining why I think a five line stanza will not be too out of place...
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I love the poem.
ReplyDeleteI just think the line "Or is it obvious that I’m just saying what you want to hear" might read better as; "Or do you think that I'm just saying, (new line here) What you want to hear." I sent you an email explaining why I think a five line stanza will not be too out of place...
yep, got that thanks, will read the poem you sent and decide then...cheers
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